finnally! i'm posting chapter...2!!!!!
Flamepaw woke to find Waterpaw pushing him back and forth.
"Come on sleepy head! We're on dawn patrol!" Waterpaw said trying to wake him.
"Since when?" Flamepaw replied groggily.
"Scince deputy Leafear said so! Now come on!" Waterpaw cried before rushing out of the den.
Flamepaw grumbled but rose. he walked over to the fresh kill pile and took a nice sized thrush and
ate it. Blueclaw came over.
"Mind if i join you?" she asked around a mouthful of freshkill.
"Sure." Flamepaw replied.
"You know...i've been speaking with Rainstar." Blueclaw said casually."and we think you may be
ready to become a warrior."
Flamepaw raised his head."Really?" he replied.
"Yes." she replied, finishing off her freshkill. "Now.
We should join the others." she said before going over to stand beside Waterpaw and
Stoneface. Flamepaw sighed as he saw Waterpaw was coming.
"Ready to go?" Waterpaw asked exitedly.
"yeah." Flamepaw said grumpily.
this is not my whole chapter 2.
ReplyDeleteGood because I was shocked when I saw how much Chapter 2 was :P :P :P
ReplyDeletelol XD yeah. this is not by all means the end of it.
ReplyDeleteThe story looks fun. If you are really asking for a bit of critiques to make it better, watch the spelling. Decide what style you want to use and stick with it. It is not always easy but you want to develop your style and not be sloppy. The story line is interesting.
ReplyDeleteo.O Does Waterpaw get to be a warrior yet? When did training start?
ReplyDeletenope. not quite yet. but he will be..at least within this book.
ReplyDeleteDid they start their training together or separately?
ReplyDeletetogether. sandeyes and flamepaw and waterpaw.
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